tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32246081.post5178050437775408736..comments2023-06-08T09:12:42.021-04:00Comments on Cleopatra's Handmaiden: Open-FacedCharmihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10022195322111249963noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32246081.post-2343820803835728412010-01-07T08:03:18.295-05:002010-01-07T08:03:18.295-05:00Yes, that will work. I'll send out the announ...Yes, that will work. I'll send out the announcement later today.Charmihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10022195322111249963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32246081.post-16587649020352419682010-01-06T23:43:22.486-05:002010-01-06T23:43:22.486-05:0023rd is a Saturday--yeah, that would totally work....23rd is a Saturday--yeah, that would totally work. At Chicory, mayhap?Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04308494265726139416noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32246081.post-45534790911998306862010-01-06T19:27:53.321-05:002010-01-06T19:27:53.321-05:00Thanks, Mark. I'm trying a little something n...Thanks, Mark. I'm trying a little something new.<br /><br />And yes, saying nice things about my poems will get you everywhere :-)<br /><br />How about a workshop on the 23rd? Or you tell me.Charmihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10022195322111249963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32246081.post-50121875436341874832010-01-06T17:52:44.707-05:002010-01-06T17:52:44.707-05:00Charmi, I like this one a lot--my personal favorit...Charmi, I like this one a lot--my personal favorites are the phrases "Crumbled heap peach nest" and "thin sweet spears". Actually the entirety of those last two lines, taken together. The piece evokes summer for me, very strongly.<br /><br />As for suggestions... hmm... I am debating whether the first & second stanza after the opening line should be swapped, or if they work better as they are... no, I'm thinking leave 'em in that order. It's a good build-up to the "Danish blue" line. :)<br /><br />So, I'm going to look through your blog now and see if I'm missing any obvious events... it's really been forever, hasn't it? I'm not even sure who's still around.<br /><br />I'm still writing, though. Semper fi & all that jazz.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04308494265726139416noreply@blogger.com